Collaborative Poetry: Becoming

Hello, hello! Kicking off the #CollaborativePoetry initiative on a high note as the previous blog post about it has clinched the top blog award from the Blogchatter community. Check here.

Before you dive into the first collaborative poetry, here are a few things I’d like to share:

1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day.

This poem is in collaboration with, Shubhangi Shukla. She’s an Indian woman on her journey to redefine what it means to be a woman. She helps other women overcome mental, emotional and energetic blocks, rediscover who they are beyond family and work obligations, and become their most confident and empowered version. Check out her business profile, here.

Collaborative Poetry: Becoming

Sitting cross-legged between yellow walls
 The canvas of my mind breathes 
Blue skies and beautiful white clouds...
 Nascent wings of my feminine, flutters 
Is this ALL to life or is there more?
 Do canvases turn concrete or expand too? 
Am I moulded or can I become HER? 
The boundless beauty that I dream of-
 Ambitious. Persevering. Sincere. Whole. Love. 
Breathe into life, breaking the yellow wall!

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ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem explores themes of self-discovery, ambition, and the quest for personal transformation. The speaker begins by setting the scene, describing themselves sitting amidst yellow walls, which can symbolize confinement or limitation. However, amidst this confinement, the canvas of the speaker’s mind is depicted as expansive, filled with imagery of blue skies and white clouds, suggesting a desire for freedom and transcendence.

The speaker then reflects on the potential of life, questioning whether there is more beyond the confines of their current existence. This introspection leads to a consideration of personal growth and empowerment. The mention of “Nascent wings of my feminine” suggests a burgeoning sense of identity and agency, particularly in the context of femininity.

The poem’s central question—whether the speaker is merely moulded by their circumstances or capable of transformation—underscores a desire for self-realization and fulfilment. The speaker aspires to embody qualities such as ambition, perseverance, sincerity, and love, envisioning a boundless beauty that transcends limitations.

The concluding lines evoke a sense of empowerment and liberation as the speaker’s aspirations breathe life into existence, breaking through the metaphorical yellow walls of constraint. This suggests a transformative journey towards self-actualization and the realization of one’s full potential.

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