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Yours is the day to celebrate & the year to look forward to — A Poem

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Dear Reader,

This is my little gift to you—a poem to inspire a hopeful start, wherever you are and whenever you need it.

Written in the timeless style of Rudyard Kipling’s ‘If,’ it encourages you to embrace your past, trust life’s process, and discover light even in the darkest moments. A celebration of fresh starts and self-discovery awaits!

Yours is the day to celebrate & the year to look forward to

If you can hold on to hope—
the hushed song of your heart,
a fragile sliver of light
that only you can see—
even on the darkest days,
when the world around you seems
bright and carefree;

If you can embrace your past,
accept your mistakes,
and give yourself another chance
to start over,
with a clean slate;

If you can trust the process,
let the alchemy of life
work its wonders on you,
without fear or resistance,
and surrender to its flow;

If, in surrendering,
you don't get lost in the "what ifs"
and "what nots,"
but focus on what’s needed in the now,
even when life feels unpredictable;

If you can wait
and keep your heart open to answers,
while working with what you know,
ready to shift course
as guidance arrives;

If you can step beyond predictability,
and realize that
your new year begins not on a date,
but in the moment
you choose to give yourself another chance—

Then yours is the day to celebrate,
and the year to look forward.

Wishing you such a celebration.
Happy New Year!


~ Seetha (aka) Preethi

Sustainable Love- A Concrete (Visual) Poetry

Image of a person adding compost to their rose plant.
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Hey there, poetry lovers! In my last post, we dove into the world of concrete poetry—a fascinating form of visual poetry where the words on the page shape themselves into a picture that embodies the poem’s theme. Today, I’m excited to share an example of this with you: my poem titled “Sustainable Love.” This piece is about comparing love’s nurturing process to composting, and I’ve shaped it like a garden tool—a shovel! Let’s dig into the thought process behind this creative choice.

Sustainable Love

Love, like 
composting,

by nature
takes time
to nurture
& g r o w
in rhythm
& rhyme.
It starts in
small bits,
like scraps
of h e a r t
then layers
of c a r e
slooowly
built up.
The scraps
seemingly useless
too broken to mend
blend and transcend
with patience and warmth
into something new, rich and full of life,
a foundation for growth, amidst toil & strife.
Like compost needing air , water , & sun,
love needs care , communication , & fun.
Love's to be tended , to prevent it from rot,
to keep it dynamic and full of thought.
Dear, take time, with your love, as you do,
with composting , daily , a little more anew.
create something , that's long-lasting & true,
a love that's sustainable & always anew.


Why a Shovel? The Thought Process Behind the Shape

When I first penned “Sustainable Love,” it followed a standard stanza format. But as I played around with the structure, I found myself inspired to mould it into a shovel—a tool that perfectly symbolizes the nurturing process I wanted to convey. Now, let’s break down the themes and how the visual structure of this poem brings them to life.

Thematic Analysis: How Composting and Love Are Alike

Love Takes Time, Just Like Composting

At the heart of this poem is a comparison between love and composting. Both require patience and care to truly flourish. Just as composting starts with small scraps—tiny bits that might seem insignificant—love often begins with small acts or gestures. These “scraps of the heart” may appear useless at first, but with the right care, they become the building blocks of something much more substantial.

Growth and Renewal

In the same way that composting transforms scraps into rich, fertile soil, love grows and renews through patience and warmth. The repeated emphasis on time—phrases like “takes time,” “slooowly,” and “daily, a little more anew”—highlights the ongoing effort needed to maintain a healthy, sustainable love. Even the most broken parts of ourselves can be mended and turned into something beautiful when nurtured with care.

Care and Communication Are Essential

Just as compost needs air, water, and sunlight to break down and enrich the soil, love requires care, communication, and a bit of fun to stay vibrant. Without these key elements, love can, like neglected compost, become stagnant. It’s all about tending to love regularly, keeping it dynamic and full of thought.

Visual Structure: Why the Shovel Shape Matters

Shovel Shape: A Symbol of Effort and Transformation

The shovel shape is a conscious design choice as I believe it’s a powerful symbol of the effort and transformation that love requires. In composting, the shovel is essential for turning, mixing, and aerating the compost pile, helping it decompose into something rich and life-giving. Similarly, love requires us to dig deep, turn over our emotions, and work through challenges to create something sustaining.

Handle and Blade: The Foundation and Work of Love

The handle of the shovel, formed by the narrow, tightly aligned first few lines, represents the grip or foundation of the poem’s message. As the poem broadens into the blade of the shovel, it symbolizes where the real work of love (and composting) happens—transforming the ordinary into something extraordinary.

Wrapping It All Up: The Power of Visual Poetry

In “Sustainable Love,” the shovel shape isn’t just for show—it’s an integral part of the poem’s meaning. This shape reinforces the central metaphor of love as a process that requires the right tools, patience, and effort to grow into something truly sustainable and renewing. Just like composting, love is a journey of transformation, and this poem visually embodies that journey.

I hope this exploration of “Sustainable Love” gives you a fresh perspective on both love and the art of concrete poetry. As always, I’d love to hear your thoughts—drop a comment below and let’s chat!

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Concrete Poetry – Visual Poetry Where Words Take Shape

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Hey there, fellow poetry lovers! Today, I want to dive into a form of poetry that’s as much about what you see as what you read—concrete poetry. If you’ve ever come across a poem where the words are arranged in the shape of a tree, a heart, or even a winding river, then you’ve experienced concrete poetry in action. It’s a fascinating blend of visual art and the written word, and it opens up a whole new way of expressing ideas. So, let’s explore what concrete poetry is, look at an example, and learn how to create one yourself!

What Is Concrete Poetry?

Concrete poetry, also known as shape poetry, is a type of poetry where the visual arrangement of the words on the page forms a picture or shape that represents the poem’s theme. The term “concrete” comes from the idea that the poem’s structure is tangible, something you can see and, in a way, almost touch with your eyes. It’s a visual expression that complements or enhances the meaning of the poem.

In concrete poetry, the shape is just as important as the words. The layout, direction, and even the spacing of the text play a crucial role in conveying the poem’s message. It’s like the words themselves are transformed into a piece of art, where the way they’re arranged on the page adds layers of meaning that go beyond what’s simply written.

An Example of Concrete Poetry

To give you a better idea of what concrete poetry looks like, let’s imagine a simple example. Picture a poem about a raindrop. In a traditional poem, you might describe the raindrop’s shape, its journey from the sky, and how it splashes on the ground. But in a concrete poem, you could take it a step further by arranging the words on the page to form the shape of a raindrop.

In this case, the words “falling,” “through the air,” and so on are arranged to mimic the shape of a raindrop descending from the sky. The word “Splashh” at the bottom completes the image, giving the reader not just a sense of the poem’s meaning but also a visual representation of it. It’s simple, but it’s effective—and it turns a straightforward poem into something more dynamic and engaging.

I used the Canva app to create this piece digitally, but you can also do it freehand—just let your creativity flow!

How to Write Your Concrete Poem

Writing a concrete poem is a creative and fun process. It’s like drawing with words, and there’s no limit to what you can do. Here’s how you can get started:

  • Choose Your Subject: Think about the theme or object you want to write about. It could be anything—a tree, a star, a spiral, a heart, or even something abstract like a wave or a whirlwind. The key is to pick something that has a distinctive shape that you can replicate with your words.

  • Write the Poem: Start by writing a traditional poem about your chosen subject. Focus on the content first—what do you want to say? How do you want to convey the emotions or ideas related to your subject? Don’t worry about the shape just yet; get your thoughts down on paper.

  • Visualize the Shape: Once you have your poem, think about how you can arrange the words to reflect the shape of your subject. This might mean breaking up lines, staggering words, or even changing the direction in which the text flows. The goal is to make the shape recognizable while keeping the poem readable.

  • Experiment with Layout: This is where the fun really begins. Start playing with the layout of your poem. Move words around, change the spacing, and see how different arrangements affect the overall look and feel. You might need to tweak the wording or even add or remove lines to get the shape just right.

  • Fine-Tune Your Creation: Once you’ve got a layout you’re happy with, go back and refine your poem. Make sure the text is still conveying your message clearly and that the shape enhances the meaning rather than distracting from it. It might take a few tries to get it just right, but that’s all part of the creative process.

Getting Creative With Concrete Poetry

For me, concrete poetry is like taking poetry to the next level. Concrete poetry is not just about the words; it’s about how those words interact with the space around them. It’s a way to push the boundaries of traditional poetry and create something that’s both visually and emotionally impactful. Plus, it’s a great way to challenge yourself creatively—trying to find the perfect balance between form and content can be a rewarding experience.

So, next time you’re in the mood to write, why not give concrete poetry a try? Let your words take shape and see what amazing creations you can come up with. Happy writing!

This post is a part of the Blogchatter Half Marathon

Milk and Mends : A Poem on Navigating Love with Food

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Here’s a poem called “Milk and Mends” that’s all about those tender moments in our relationships where love and forgiveness come into play, especially in the kitchen. You know, those simple gestures and little culinary mishaps that somehow lead to a deeper understanding and bring us closer together. I hope you find it as touching as I do, and that it reminds you of the beautiful ways we mend our hearts with the ones we love. Also let me know what do you think is the relationship of the poet and the other person in this poem?

Milk and Mends

He whispered in my ear, 
"There's a gift awaiting in the kitchen."  
I rushed to our little haven,  
To be welcomed by  
The burnt smell of milk cream,  
Spills marking a map to a world unknown.  

Oh wait, I see a little waterfall  
Forming a puddle under the granite slab, 
And four tiles away from it,  
Two small cups half-filled with milk,  
Rose petals on a royal bath,  
Pampered with a sprinkle of cocoa powder.  

I turn back to look at him— 
A sorry face cuts through him,  
For the fight last night 
Over unfinished homework.  

Written as part of #BlogchatterFoodFest.

Collaborative Poem: The Great Escape

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Today’s collaboration is with my tween daughter, and I guarantee this poem will make you burst out laughing. If you’re curious about all the excitement or experiencing a bit of FOMO, don’t worry. Check out the post below and join the conversation.

Before you dive into the #CollaborativePoetry for the day, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day:

Today, I’ve teamed up with my 12-year-old daughter, Miss.M, once again to craft a comical poem, a stark contrast from the one we created at the start (read it here) of this initiative.

We had a blast and laughed until our stomachs hurt while penning this poem. Honestly, it was all in good fun, with no rhyme or reason behind it.

However, ChatGPT’s analysis takes it to the next level by highlighting an undertone of satire. Check it out at the end of this post. So, without further ado, let’s dive into the poem.

Collaborative Poem - The Great Escape

I had once farted,
A big-bang that it started
Spread till the café in America
Ruining everyone's caffé mocha,
Making people go mad at me-
I then put on my shoes, ready to flee,
Sprinting across countries
To land in a land
Where I have no one to appease
And can fart just at ease...

©www.promisingpoetry.org

ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem offers a humorous and lighthearted take on a seemingly embarrassing situation—the speaker’s fart causing chaos in a café. The use of comedic exaggeration, such as describing the fart as a “big-bang” and its repercussions spreading across countries, adds to the whimsical tone of the poem.

Despite the initial embarrassment and the anger of others, the speaker decides to flee the scene, putting on their shoes and sprinting across countries to find a place where they can fart without inhibition. This journey symbolizes a quest for freedom from societal norms and expectations, where the speaker seeks refuge in a land where they feel no pressure to conform.

Overall, the poem entertains with its playful language and absurd scenario while also touching on themes of individual autonomy and the desire to break free from societal constraints. It offers a humorous commentary on human behavior and the lengths to which one might go to escape judgment and embrace personal freedom.

That’s a wrap for today! If you’re someone still on the fence, wondering if you can write poetry, or thinking that poetry is a serious affair requiring a lot of effort, then I’m sure this poem will change your perspective. It’s time to let go of your fears and have fun penning poetry.

To see your masterpiece showcased here, click here to get all the details!

Happy Poetrying!!

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Collaborative Poem: Punctuating Life

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Today’s collaboration is an anonymous one, and I’m thrilled to share it with you! If you’re curious about all the excitement or experiencing a bit of FOMO, don’t worry. Check out the post below and join the conversation.

Before you dive into the #CollaborativePoetry for the day, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day:

Today’s collaboration is an anonymous one, and I must say I enjoyed the way the poem turned out. The verses capture an emotion that many of us can relate to—love and longing. So, without further ado, let’s dive into the poem.

Collaborative Poem -Punctuating Life

In the state between wakefulness and sleep
You happen to be my dearest dreams
A dream never come true...
Chasing mirages are my only memories-
An oasis in the dull and drab of life
Love, what keeps you alive?
Just two fingers crossed for days that come by,
Marriage of dreams & destiny, a sweet lullaby...
No thoughts of what ifs
When full stops can dance into semicolons in a punctuating life...

©www.promisingpoetry.org

ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem delves into the realm of dreams and aspirations, exploring the intersection between imagination and reality. It begins by describing a state of liminality—between wakefulness and sleep—where the beloved exists as a cherished dream, yet one that remains unfulfilled. This unattainable dream is likened to a mirage, symbolizing the ephemeral nature of desires and memories.

The speaker reflects on the role of love in sustaining hope and vitality amidst the mundane aspects of life. Despite the challenges and uncertainties they face, the speaker maintains a sense of optimism, symbolized by the metaphor of crossing fingers for better days ahead.

The imagery of marriage between dreams and destiny evokes a sense of harmony and acceptance, suggesting a willingness to embrace life’s journey with all its twists and turns. The reference to punctuation marks like full stops and semicolons metaphorically represents the fluidity and potential for change within the fabric of existence.

Overall, the poem conveys a sense of longing and introspection, exploring themes of love, hope, and resilience in the face of life’s uncertainties. It invites readers to contemplate the delicate balance between dreams and reality, and the transformative power of imagination in shaping our perceptions and experiences.

That’s a wrap for today! Share your thoughts about this initiative, this poem, or any others featured so far. Your feedback will help me improve and reach more people. Let me know in the comments section—I’m all ears!

Meanwhile, if you want to see your masterpiece showcased here, click here to get all the details!

Happy Poetrying!!

Collaborative Poetry: Look out for the Gods

Today’s collaboration is a thoughtful one, and I’m thrilled to share it with you! If you’re curious about all the excitement or experiencing a bit of FOMO, don’t worry. Check out the post below and join the conversation.

Before you dive into the #CollaborativePoetry for the day, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day:

Kids never cease to amaze me with their grasp of life, and capturing their thought processes in verses is a beautiful journey that I thoroughly enjoy. Blessed with such an experience is this lovely poem by a tween girl.

This poem is a collaboration with Nidharshanaa, an enthusiastic 12-year-old passionate about art and craft. Alongside her creative pursuits, she enjoys singing, dancing, and diving into books—a recently discovered hobby. Time to get inspired by her poem!


Collaborative Poetry - Look out for the Gods

A suitable house to live, a nice dress to wear, are all my needs to live peacefully
A house filled with hugs & a dress with linen of love makes me live more happily!
Alas, across the road, I see people longing for a dress to escape from the cold winter
Where are their clothes & what gives them shelter?
Oh God, why do you make them suffer like this? What did they do wrong?
Or is it just part of a bigger plan I know not of? Yet, it feels just so wrong...
So I treat them as God; extend my hand to fulfil their needs
B'coz people say you can witness God's smile when you do good deeds...
It's always a great day for me as I get blessings from many Gods in my area
To experience the joy I feel & earn some blessings, look for Gods in your area!

©www.promisingpoetry.org

ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem explores themes of gratitude, empathy, and the interconnectedness of humanity. It begins by highlighting the speaker’s simple needs for a suitable house and a nice dress, which they believe are sufficient for a peaceful life. However, upon witnessing the struggles of others less fortunate, the speaker’s perspective shifts.

The contrast between the speaker’s contentment and the suffering of those across the road prompts questions about the nature of God and the reasons behind human suffering. The speaker grapples with the apparent injustice of their situation and questions why some people must endure hardship while others live comfortably.

Despite these existential queries, the speaker chooses to respond with compassion and action. They extend a helping hand to those in need, viewing their acts of kindness as a way to serve God and alleviate the suffering of others. This reflects a belief in the interconnectedness of humanity and the idea that helping others is a pathway to spiritual fulfilment.

The poem concludes with a message of hope and encouragement, suggesting that by seeking out opportunities to help others, individuals can experience the joy of giving and receive blessings in return. This underscores the idea that acts of kindness have the power to create positive ripple effects and foster a sense of community and goodwill.

That’s a wrap for today, and I’m sure you’re feeling as inspired as I am. While adults often get caught up in various philosophies, kids simply live life their way and show us the purpose of life through their simplest actions. Don’t you agree?

On that reflective note, if you want to see your masterpiece showcased here, click here to get all the details!

P.S. While collaborating with the kiddo today, I received certification from her that I do write poetry well! Pretty cool, right? It got me pumped to engage in more collaborations! See you soon with another poem!!

Happy Poetrying!!

Collaborative Poetry: Midnight Marvels

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Today’s collaboration is a special one and I am so excited to share it with you! If you’re wondering what all the buzz is about or feeling FOMO, fret not. Check out the post below and join the conversation.

Before you dive into the #CollaborativePoetry for the day, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day:

You might accuse me of bias, but I can’t help it—I’m always brimming with excitement when collaborating with kids. Their playful energy is contagious, and what better way to unleash it than through poetry?

This poem is a collaboration with Aadya Sreenivas, an enthusiastic 11-year-old who thrives on learning new things and adores art and craft. She shares that practising Bharatnatyam keeps her relaxed. Let’s take a quick dive into her poem!

Collaborative Poetry - Midnight Marvels

Twinkling little stars- shining up in the sky
You look so happy, oh tell me why?
Moon- so high, shining bright & looking white
Tell me your secret for feeling so happy & light...
Talking with stars every night, dear moon,
Do you make up faces like a comical cartoon??
Hey stars, do you always go ha ha ha
When the moon goes blah blah blah?
Stars & moon, you make me happy
Lifting up my mood, even when I feel crappy!

©www.promisingpoetry.org

ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

This poem captures a whimsical dialogue between the speaker and celestial bodies—the twinkling stars and the shining moon. The speaker marvels at the apparent happiness and brightness of these celestial objects, prompting them to inquire about the secrets behind their joy.

The imagery of the stars twinkling and the moon shining high evokes a sense of wonder and admiration. The playful tone of the poem is reflected in the speaker’s light-hearted questions, imagining the moon making faces like a cartoon and the stars laughing in response to the moon’s chatter.

Despite the simplicity of the conversation, there’s a deeper emotional resonance underlying the interaction. The speaker finds solace and happiness in the presence of these celestial beings, which serve as sources of comfort and upliftment during times of sadness or low mood.

Overall, the poem celebrates the beauty of nature and the sense of wonder it evokes, while also highlighting the simple joys found in connecting with the world around us, even if it’s through imagined conversations with stars and the moon.

That’s a wrap for today! I’m confident this delightful piece of poetry has sparked joy and ignited your sense of wonder and playfulness!So, what are you waiting for? Reach out to me now—your masterpiece could be featured here tomorrow!

And if there are kids in your vicinity, share this with them and encourage them to collaborate. I’ll be there for them (and you too, if you need help!) every step of the way. Let’s infuse poetry into our daily lives. Are you ready?

If you want to see your masterpiece featured here, click on the post below to get all the details!

Happy Poetrying!!

Collaborative Poetry: The Pillion Rider

Hello, hello! Loving how each #CollaborativePoetry brings surprises as I collaborate with another person. If you’re wondering what all the buzz is about or feeling FOMO, fret not. Check out the post below and join the conversation.


Before you dive into the #CollaborativePoetry for the day, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day:

This poem is in collaboration with, Smt.Saradha Vishwanathan. She’s a dedicated HDFC Life Executive Planner channelling all her earnings into social services, striving to uplift communities one policy at a time. Moreover, she is a lively and an optimistic person. Click here to connect with her.

Collaborative Poem - The pillion rider

The witness of birth, life and death is one and the same,
Where a flower blooms, the leaves wither,
Also, where flowers bloom, so does hope...
What am I looking at- death or revival? surrender or survival?
Life is forever, in search of new expressions-
Once I believed, now mere witness to fading expressions...
So stand without desire and fear
Every experience a life lesson, oh dear!
Yes, behind all that moves, leave all unto Him.
Be the pillion rider, for He shall navigate the bumps.

©www.promisingpoetry.org

ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem delves into themes of life, death, hope, surrender, and spiritual faith. It begins by acknowledging the cyclical nature of existence, where birth, life, and death are intertwined. The imagery of a flower blooming and leaves withering illustrates this perpetual cycle of creation and decay. Despite the inevitability of death, the poem also highlights the concurrent presence of hope whenever new life emerges.

The speaker reflects on the ambiguity of their observations, questioning whether they are witnessing death or revival, surrender or survival. This uncertainty mirrors the complexities of life and the myriad emotions that accompany its various phases.

As the poem progresses, the speaker contemplates the transient nature of life and their evolving perspective. They transition from active participation in life to a more detached role of being a witness to its fleeting moments. This shift in perspective is accompanied by a sense of acceptance and equanimity, as the speaker learns to stand without desire and fear, embracing each experience as a valuable lesson.

The poem culminates with a surrender to a higher power, symbolized by the reference to “Him.” This surrender is not a resignation but an acknowledgment of divine guidance and providence. The metaphor of enjoying the pavilion ride underscores the idea of relinquishing control and trusting in a greater plan, even amidst life’s inevitable challenges and uncertainties. Overall, the poem celebrates the cyclical nature of life while advocating for acceptance, resilience, and faith in the face of its mysteries.

That’s a wrap for today! What are your thoughts on this initiative? Does it pique your interest in poetry? Is there anything else you’d like to know or suggest for future additions? Share your perspective on this poem in the comments below!


Also, if you want to see your masterpiece featured here, click on the post below to get all the details!

Happy Poetrying!!

Collaborative Poetry: Becoming

Hello, hello! Kicking off the #CollaborativePoetry initiative on a high note as the previous blog post about it has clinched the top blog award from the Blogchatter community. Check here.


Before you dive into the first collaborative poetry, here are a few things I’d like to share:

  1. The first line of the poem is written by the other person, while the second by me, and so on, alternatingly.
  2. What you see here is a raw, first draft that will undergo further editing before finding its place within the pages of a book.
  3. There is no fixed theme or title before embarking on this poetic journey. With each line, our perspectives shifts, and so does the direction of the poem. That’s the uniqueness and beauty of this #CollaborativePoetry.
  4. Every collaborator in this series comes from different backgrounds, ranging from novice to expert in writing/poetry.
  5. To add an extra layer of intrigue, for each poem, I’ll share an analysis generated by ChatGPT. This allows you to see if your understanding or perspective of the poem aligns with it or not. Remember, the beauty of poetry lies in its ability to hold multiple perspectives, all of which can be valid.

So, let’s dive into the poem of the day.

This poem is in collaboration with, Shubhangi Shukla. She’s an Indian woman on her journey to redefine what it means to be a woman. She helps other women overcome mental, emotional and energetic blocks, rediscover who they are beyond family and work obligations, and become their most confident and empowered version. Check out her business profile, here.

Collaborative Poetry: Becoming

Sitting cross-legged between yellow walls
The canvas of my mind breathes
Blue skies and beautiful white clouds...
Nascent wings of my feminine, flutters
Is this ALL to life or is there more?
Do canvases turn concrete or expand too?
Am I moulded or can I become HER?
The boundless beauty that I dream of-
Ambitious. Persevering. Sincere. Whole. Love.
Breathe into life, breaking the yellow wall!

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ChatGPT’s Analysis of the Poem:

The poem explores themes of self-discovery, ambition, and the quest for personal transformation. The speaker begins by setting the scene, describing themselves sitting amidst yellow walls, which can symbolize confinement or limitation. However, amidst this confinement, the canvas of the speaker’s mind is depicted as expansive, filled with imagery of blue skies and white clouds, suggesting a desire for freedom and transcendence.

The speaker then reflects on the potential of life, questioning whether there is more beyond the confines of their current existence. This introspection leads to a consideration of personal growth and empowerment. The mention of “Nascent wings of my feminine” suggests a burgeoning sense of identity and agency, particularly in the context of femininity.

The poem’s central question—whether the speaker is merely moulded by their circumstances or capable of transformation—underscores a desire for self-realization and fulfilment. The speaker aspires to embody qualities such as ambition, perseverance, sincerity, and love, envisioning a boundless beauty that transcends limitations.

The concluding lines evoke a sense of empowerment and liberation as the speaker’s aspirations breathe life into existence, breaking through the metaphorical yellow walls of constraint. This suggests a transformative journey towards self-actualization and the realization of one’s full potential.


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